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The Nursery Rhyme Book
SIMPLE
SIMON met a pieman,
Going
to the fair ;
Says
Simple Simon to the pieman,
"Let
me taste your ware."
Says
the pieman to Simple Simon,
"Show
me first your penny."
Says
Simple Simon to the pieman,
"
Indeed I have not any."
Simple
Simon went a-fishing
For
to catch a whale :
All
the water he had got
Was
in his mother's pail !
Golden Gate Ferry Sonoma. Photograph made by Michael C. Berch
I was traveling one warm summer morning. The sea air off the
bay was heavy with the smell of salt. I love that smell. It felt so free to be on
the ferry. We have been working so hard on this bid all week, and
the Project Manager wanted to see results. I’m not usually so distracted. What’s
my problem? I wanted to be free again, like right now, the way this breeze
forces my eyes closed. The roar of boat seemed to sooth me. I am perfectly
comfortable on this boat full of strangers. I love that we rarely speak.
I hate
it when people talk to me on the Ferry. Can’t they see that I am busy loving
this journey? I have been taking this trip for almost a year now but still can’t
believe how beautiful it is here. I could hear the seagulls fighting over their prize as we passed under a bridge. A group of bridge workers were getting ready
to go to work for the day. How do they get into that small scaffold every
morning? I don’t see a boat anywhere. What if an emergency arose? The boat roared
forward. The little lego buildings are starting to form on the horizon. Oh no,
has that much time already passed? My ride is only 45mins. I need to try to
close my eyes before the rat race starts today. I shut my eyes inside of my morning wake-up haze.
Am I dreaming? I saw the sunrise on the ocean in
my mind as a man approached me on the beach. He said, “Hey!”, I looked at him. “hey,
are you asleep”? I woke from my dream startled. The man sitting next to me was
an odd-looking character. He was wearing a tall hat with a flat brim. One of
his eyes seemed to move differently than the other. He looked clean but dressed
in clothing from an ancient midlevel era. He had a big stupid grin on his
face. “Names Simeon”, he shouted over the roaring motors. I smiled telling him,
“hi Simeon, my name is Ryan, what’s up”? He said, “you wanna do something really
cool today”? Annoyed and thinking about the beach in my dream, I grunted, “That
sounds tempting, but no thank you, I’m going to work”. He asked, “ Are you sure
you don’t want to go, i'm going whale fishing?” You cant catch a whale in the
Bay!”, I scoffed. I pictured a pale of water in my mind for some reason. “Whacha
got there now”? He pointed beneath the seat. I said."Oh this, is my favorite wine choice". “Whats your favorite flavor?”, he pushed. “Well its pie of course”, I
exclaimed. He smiled saying “can I taste it”? I could now see the sun reflecting
on the San Francisco high-rise skyline and bathing in the ocean like a golden
path leading to the city. “No, this stuff is expensive, but you can buy it”. He scowled
and said, “I don’t have a penny.”
Bibliography:
“SIMPLE
SIMON” from the Nursery Rhyme Book by L. Leslie Brooke. https://archive.org/stream/nurseryrhymebook01lang#page/n5/mode/2up
I can't really see how the nursery rhyme and the story correlate. An author's note at the end of the story would have been a bit helpful. I'm glad I read your introduction first. You have a few personal references about you that I would have not known. Like the wine reference and the reference to you living on the east/west coast. Next time add an author's note to show how you went from the nursery rhyme to the story you came up with.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was a good story but I have to agree with Kalen that it needed an author’s note to clear up any confusion the readers may have. I did enjoy how descriptive you were with your vision of the skyline and ocean it helped me feel drawn into the story. I would suggest breaking up the nursery rhyme in sections and placing them in front of each paragraph of your story. This would maybe help readers see the connection between your story and the nursery rhyme.
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